ممكن تساعدونى فى تصحيح البرجراف ده

[بهار]

السلام عليكم ممكن تساعدونى فى تصحيح البراجراف ده وتقولولى كام سطر اكتب فى الامتحان

the most important person in your life
In fact the most important person in my life is my mother. my mother is agood example for me . And she learned me alot of value in life such as courage , unselfishness, self confidence. she always decide on your goal and try to achieve it . Although she usually meets alot of difficulties . to sum up the person who i admire is my mother owing to being kind

وممكن تقيموا الموضوع وتقولولى درجه ( على فكره انا مش بعرف اكتب براجراف بس دى محاوله) وانا مش هزعل لو قولتولى انى جبت مثلا صفر لا هحاول تانى

[ابو الولد]

دة صعب اوي

[Sherif Elkhodary]

السلام عليكم ممكن تساعدونى فى تصحيح البراجراف ده وتقولولى كام سطر اكتب فى الامتحان

the most important person in your life
In fact the most important person in my life is my mother. my mother is agood example for me . And she learned me alot of value in life such as courage , unselfishness, self confidence. she always decide on your goal and try to achieve it . Athough she usually meets alot of difficulies . to sum up the person who i admire is my mother owing to being kind
وممكن تقيموا الموضوع وتقولولى درجه ( على فكره انا مش بعرف اكتب براجراف بس دى محاوله) وانا مش هزعل لو قولتولى انى جبت مثلا صفر لا هحاول تانى

هو كويس بس يعني ممكن تزود شوية هيبقي افضل

بس اسلوبك حلو كويس

[بهار]

مرسيى لمرورك شريف
وارجو من كل اخواتى فى المنتدى تحديد الجمل الخاطئه ( لانى بجد مش بعرف اكتب براجراف)
بالله عليكم تساعدونى

[abdou mostafa]

يوجد بع الاخطاء فى القواعد
مثل
1- a lot of values
and self confidence
she always decides on my goal

[بهار]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة abdou mostafa

يوجد بع الاخطاء فى القواعد
مثل
1- a lot of values
and self confidence
she always decides on my goal

مرسيى على مرورك ومساعدتى

[adham_592005]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة بهار

السلام عليكم ممكن تساعدونى فى تصحيح البراجراف ده وتقولولى كام سطر اكتب فى الامتحان

the most important person in your life

In fact the most important person in my life is my mother. my mother is agood example for me . And she learned me alot of value in life such as courage , unselfishness, self confidence. she always decide on your goal and try to achieve it . Although she usually meets alot of difficulties . to sum up the person who i admire is my mother owing to being kind

وممكن تقيموا الموضوع وتقولولى درجه ( على فكره انا مش بعرف اكتب براجراف بس دى محاوله) وانا مش هزعل لو قولتولى انى جبت مثلا صفر لا هحاول تانى

بسم الله الرحمن الرحيم
احييك على هذا ال Paragragh
لكن به عدد من الاخطاء منها ما يمكن ان نتجاوز عنه ومنها الخطأ الفادح (لاحظ الالوان)
وممكن ان يكون كالتالى:

In fact the most important person in my life is my mother. She is agood example to me . She taught me alot of values such as courage, unselfishness, self confidence. She always advises me to decide on my goal and try to achieve it. Although she usually meets alot of difficulties, she has time to help me. She always encourages me to be better. She takes much care of me. Indeed, I am proud of her. I admire her very much. The end

[بهار]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة adham_592005

بسم الله الرحمن الرحيم
احييك على هذا ال Paragragh
لكن به عدد من الاخطاء منها ما يمكن ان نتجاوز عنه ومنها الخطأ الفادح (لاحظ الالوان)
وممكن ان يكون كالتالى:

In fact the most important person in my life is my mother. She is agood example to me . She taught me alot of values such as courage, unselfishness, self confidence. She always advises me to decide on my goal and try to achieve it. Although she usually meets alot of difficulties, she has time to help me. She always encourages me to be better. She takes much care of me. Indeed, I am proud of her. I admire her very much. The end

شكرا لك يا مستر (بجد فى اخطاء هبله اوى انا غلط فيها)